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Nightwhisper |
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Affiliation
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Warrior of ShadowClan | |
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Vitals
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Living at the age of 16 Moons (1.2 Years)
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Appearance
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| Short Description: |
A longhaired black and white she-cat with green eyes & curled ears |
| Long Description: | Nightwhisper is a long haired black and white she-cat, she has wide blunt green eyes which are always shining. Her ears are small and curled. She’s a quite small cat compared to many of her clanmates. Her dark pelt and small size makes night hunting and the element of suprise easy for her. She has a constant excitement shining in her eyes. She moves around with a energetic jump to it. Her pelt is often unkempt snagging on trees making it a mess she rarely bothers to fix. |
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Personality
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Nightwhisper is fiercely loyal to her clan often not hesitating to jump into danger paws first if it meant protecting her clanmates. She has always been confident since she was a kit at times she can be overconfident and can come off as rude or intrusive because of it. She wont let anything stop her between her confidence and creativity she finds ways around anything in order to succeed. Despite the fact she can be loud she’s very observant and quickly recognises patterns in behaviour of both clanmates and enemies. She spends a lot of time trying to prove herself as a loyal and strong warrior which can lead her to be reckless at times. |
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History
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| Full History: | When she was a kit Nightkit was quite bossy often getting herself into trouble whether it was trying to sneak out of camp to hunt or sneaking into the medicine den. She would jump at any opportunity to help often helping the apprentices with cleaning out the elders den. She looked up to her father Shadewalker a lot she looks almost identical to him and admired his bravery and unwavering loyalty to Shadowclan she always wanted to be as fierce as him. Her mother Breezeflower always kept her in check making sure she wouldnt do anything to reckless and always showing her how important it is to love and care for her clan.
Nightpaw was apprenticed to a strict warrior who could be a voice of reason to her and could show her critical thinking, she felt she was held back feeling she was being treated like a kit though quickly came to learn her mentor was pushing her to understand her flaws and how to work around them. she learned a lot on working with her clanmates which she later realised she had really needed. She often found herself playing with the kits or helping out with the elders while at first she would complain how its not fair she has to do that while other apprentices were out hunting or battle training but she came to realise she really did enjoy it. Nothing made her more happy then to make the kits laugh and allow their mothers to rest for a bit while she would have a parade of kits following her around because of this she found herself developing a motherly instinct to protect the kits of the clan with everything she has vowing to never let anything bad happen to them.
When she became a warrior Nightwhisper never stopped hanging around the kits and found herself very often kitsitting she didn’t mind it she felt like she was showing her clanmates her loyalty to them by making sure the queens could have a moment to rest while she played with the kits. she could only hope some of the kits could look up to her and want to be anything like her. becoming a warrior made her feel that she’s becoming more and more like her father. She would always try to go on patrols with him to prove to him that she’s a good warrior just like him. always looking for his approval still looking up to him just as much as when she was a kit. While trying to prove herself to him she began to forget some things her mentor had taught her about not being reckless for her safety just to prove herself. Shortly after becoming a warrior her father passed away to sickness. Nightwhisper was dismayed and would have preferred to lay in her nest but she always pushed herself to ensure it wouldnt get in the way of her warrior duties. She would offer to look after the kits knowing they would be able to distract her from her father. Over the moon after her father passed away though she was still grieving she knew she had to put her clan first. She found joy in helping her clanmates and though it she was able to heal from losing her father |
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Family
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| Sire: | Pending Sire (Sire will be created after approval) |
| Dam: | Pending Dam (Dam will be created after approval) |
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Pedigree
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Significant Cats
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Notes & Additional Details
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| Genetics: | This character requires a genetic code to be bred. |
| Bans Data: | Nightwhisper has been compiled into the bans records. Nightwhisper is a Female Cat with a Black Non-color restricted Bicolor pelt of Long Normal textured hair. They are of Small Size and Common build. Their eyes are Green and ears are Abnormal. Their tail is Normal, with Normal paws and Normal legs. They are of Non-purebred descent. |
Approved! Welcome to the site!
Just one thing!
History:
“When she was a kit Nightkit was quite bossy always leading the other kits around and getting herself into trouble whether it was trying to sneak out of camp to hunt or sneaking into the medicine den. ” – Nightwhisper would have shared the nursery den with Brackenwing (15 moons), Emberdust (14 moons), and Whisperingwind (14 moons). Both of those other characters have players who are inactive. In this case you’d have to get permission from them if you want your character to have bossed them around. Personality, I don’t mind if she bullied Emberdust a bit, as she would have been a moon younger than her, and Emberdust and Whisperingwind, lost their mother after the kitting about a moon later. Which could be dramatic! Feel free to use Emberdust in your example, but avoid the use of including other characters unless you have permission.
Hello and welcome to the site. Usually characters go through a few rounds of edits, so don’t be discouraged!
APPEARANCE:
-There are just a few instances where the beginning of your sentences aren’t capitalized.
PERSONALITY:
“Despite the fact she can be loud and annoying to other cats..” – In this instance, this would be considered light powerplay, in insinuating that other cats would find her annoying. If you describe the traits you’d want to show as could be considered annoying, describe that here and avoid mentioning how other cats might perceive her.
HISTORY:
“When she was a kit Nightkit was the leader always getting herself into trouble whether it was trying to sneak out of camp to hunt or sneaking into the medicine den.” – This sentence is unclear.
“Shortly after becoming a warrior her father passed away to sickness. Nightwhisper was dismayed barely able to bring herself to leave camp not having motivation to do anything. She would offer to look after the kits knowing they would be able to distract her from her father. Over the next couple moons she slowly started acting more normal but her grief never left but she knew she had to put her clan above it and keeps her confidence to make herself seem as normal as possible.” – While passing to Starclan would be a bit sad, those who linger too much on their grief (especially if it took her two moons to start feeling better) it may have interfered with her ability to do her warrior duties, which would be discouraged. Passing onto Starclan is a natural thing, and while its natural for her to be sad, it’d probably be better if you shortened the time of her grief period.
OVERALL:
– Just so you are aware the three current kits have been in the nursery for 4 moons. Before that was Sootpaw and Ashpaw who have been two moons between the current kits. I’ve been keeping track and it seems that the nursery has had some amounts of kits for your backstory to make sense with her being in the nursery to help.
– Fabulous start! You really don’t have much to edit.